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Fecha: 18/02/09 - 06:37 pm Título: Capítulo 2

kya!

kiero ke le sigas T_T

me enkanta esta pareja, y tu fic esta genial!

me enkamnta la historia!

sigue, onegai!!!!

T_T

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Fecha: 27/10/08 - 08:40 pm Título: Capítulo 2

hola! muy apesar de lo que dices la historia me gusta mucho si esta algo rara escrita pero vale la pena si me lo permites te digo lo siguiente:

*revisa el texto unas dos veces antes de subirlo las faltas de ortografia no son demasiadas pero si conviene revisar lña coherencia de las palabras en la historia

*tal vez poner los nombres d quien estan hablando te ayude pero que tal si pruebas sin marcarcarlos a cada dialogo te aseguro que si se ve la ilacion de lo que dicen pues escribes claro

*se ve bien la relacion shino/kiba trata de no aventarnosla de golpe y porrazo de manera dramatica en extremo algo sutil sera lo apropiado debido al marco que le pones a tu historia

*lo ultimoseria que espero que estes muy bien y que sigas escribiendo espero que te ayude lo anterior y te mando un gran abrazo n_n que estes muy bien

P.D: me agrada la leve mencion de SasuNaru muy bellos.



Respuesta del autor: mmm...ok

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Fecha: 27/10/08 - 08:40 pm Título: Capítulo 2

hola! muy apesar de lo que dices la historia me gusta mucho si esta algo rara escrita pero vale la pena si me lo permites te digo lo siguiente:

*revisa el texto unas dos veces antes de subirlo las faltas de ortografia no son demasiadas pero si conviene revisar lña coherencia de las palabras en la historia

*tal vez poner los nombres d quien estan hablando te ayude pero que tal si pruebas sin marcarcarlos a cada dialogo te aseguro que si se ve la ilacion de lo que dicen pues escribes claro

*se ve bien la relacion shino/kiba trata de no aventarnosla de golpe y porrazo de manera dramatica en extremo algo sutil sera lo apropiado debido al marco que le pones a tu historia

*lo ultimoseria que espero que estes muy bien y que sigas escribiendo espero que te ayude lo anterior y te mando un gran abrazo n_n que estes muy bien

P.D: me agrada la leve mencion de SasuNaru muy bellos.

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Fecha: 27/09/08 - 09:51 pm Título: ¿Te conozco?, señor perfecto...

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