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Fecha: 20/08/08 - 07:09 am Título: Capítulo 1

Buenas.

En este momento estoy escribiendo yo misma una historia, pero quise hacer un alto para ver si encontraba algo bueno que leer, y tuve suerte.

La suya es una hermosa historia, de hecho, desgarradora, pero además llena de una dulzura que calma. Estoy realmente feliz de haber podido leerla, y la felicito por crear algo tan maravilloso a partir de una anécdota pequeñísima.

Ahora, como soy una persona sumamente desagradable, me siento en la obligación de aconsejarle que revise su puntuación; necesita urgentemente añadir puntos seguidos y signos de interrogación, sobre todo.

Nuevamente, felicitaciones y gracias por la bella historia.

Quedo a sus pies.



Respuesta del autor: Muchas gracias por tu comentario, son personajes que yo quiero mucho y me es sumamente grato que a alguien le hubiese interesado esta sencilla historia, el momento de mis personajes, me dan más ganas de seguir escribiendo con personas que como tu hacen espacio a los originales.rnrnEs bueno recibir alabanzas como también las críticas constructivas, al releerlo me di cuenta a lo que te referías con lo de la puntuación y los signos, esto suele pasar porque tengo tan claro en la cabeza que o quién dice que y caígo en estos errores, espero poder corregirlo pronto apenas tenga tiempo para revisar con calma (cosa que no suelo hacer en el momento de escribir)rnrnY de nuevo muchas gracias por dejar tu aporte

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